As I placed my head on the pillow to sleep, I suddenly thought about Artie. My heart choked up as if something was squeezing it, hard.
The pain pushed the blood, salt, and tears out of my soul.
I rose out of bed, realizing that sleep was impossible, and walked quietly, almost hypnotically, over to the master bath. What I needed was a good long soak in the tub . . .
. . . in the dark, except for the candle I lit in the corner.
As I added some lavender bubble bath to the water, I remembered that citric acid was listed on the back of the jar. I laughed bitterly as I sank into the warm foamy Jacuzzi. Did I want to be preserved, like a pickle? Citric acid is added not only as a preservative, but also to add a sour taste to food. I was already sour enough, thank you very much.
Suddenly, a dark shape entered the room and stood in front of my prone form. The candlelight shaped the shadow of the man.
Artie.
Artie, who left me weeks ago.
Artie, who had gone silent when he found out what I had done.
Artie now stripped off his clothes and joined me in the womb-like water.
He broke his month-long silence by asking, “Why are you mumbling about citric acid?”
Acid seemed to be juicing up my saliva. “It’s one of the ingredients in my bubble bath.”
“Darling, citric acid is biochemical. It occurs in the metabolism of all living things.”
I tried to not breathe, think, or respond. What did he mean?
“Sweetie,” he continued, “what you did was wrong. But metabolically, we are weaved together like yarn into a scarf. You are mine. I am yours. For better or for worse.”
Artie drew me to him, the two of us intertwined in the effervescent closeness.
“I’m sorry for the ‘worse.’” I whispered.
“So am I. So am I,” he whispered back before kissing me as if he’d never, ever stop.
Flash fiction – inspired from my creative writing prompt to pick up a can in the kitchen pantry and write a story based on its ingredients. Can you guess what can I picked? The winner gets a paperback copy of my novel The Right Wrong Man. Write your guess in the comments section. (If more than one person guesses the correct answer, names will be placed in a . . . can . . . and the name pulled out, wins.)
Canned artichokes! 🙂
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What a guess!!!
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I don’t quite know how to take that. I guess I have to wait for your answer. 🙂
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For some reason, this brought back memories of when Diana entered Anne’s story into the Rollings Reliable Baking Powder contest in Anne of Green Gables by writing the product into the overwrought love scene, unbeknownst to Anne.
I like how you mixed a little “dirty” with the “clean.” xD
And I’m with Norah: canned artichokes.
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Oh, I love your response – a little dirty with the clean. Your guess is quite interesting!! I can’t say I remember the Ann of Green Gables scene, but it sounds fun. 🙂
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I am going to guess canned tomatoes. Love the story!!
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Canned tomatoes can be very sassy! Thanks for your guess, Darlene.
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Great story. Chopped Tomatoes.
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Thanks for weighing in, Mary. Chopped tomatoes always add some healthy zest to a meal, and a relationship. . . ? 😏
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Fun bit of flash, Pam! 🙂
Gosh, I love Anne of Green Gables, but I don’t remember the scene Erik mentioned. I will have to re-read. 🙂
A can of soup. (Really no idea.)
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A can of soup is a good guess. What kind of soup? The answer will be revealed in a few days… hey, if this post gets us to re-read Anne of Green Gables, all the better. 🤗
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Not a. Clue where you were headed with that one… love how you do that… I will say stewed tomatoes!
Have a great weekend.
Sharon
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Stewed tomatoes add some sauciness to the pot, for sure! So glad this story kept you intrigued- I have done my job. 😁
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Great story, Pam. Since I don’t eat canned veggies…I’m clueless! 🙂
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No canned veggies at all?? I buy fresh but admit that I’ll use canned tomato sauce, soups, corn etc at times for casseroles.
I’m just returning from vacation and then I’m going to run out and buy your book!
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I’m going for a touch of the analytical and what I can see so a can of cranberry sauce for me! Citric acid … clearly has properties beyond the scientific … flash fiction indeed!
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Citric acid was is a surprise when I researched it. Who knew? I like your analytical mind. 😎
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Nice story! I’m guessing the stewed tomatoes – since your character is stewing in the tub.
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What a smart guess! The answer will be revealed in a few days. 😍
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Love it!!
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I love that you love it! 👌😘
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I’m guessing Red Hot Tomatoes by the end of the bath! fantastic!
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Ha ha. Red hot tomatoes is a spicy saucy guess! Thanks – answer to be revealed soon. XO
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I need to pay more attention to ingredients on can labels. Your posts have the right balance of sweet and sour – hilarious!
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I got hot and cold, sour and sweet just writing the story- still hot now 😲
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Can-dle?
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What an original answer! “Lights” up the situation. 😄
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My guess is a small can of those hot Mexican peppers.
Hot story, Pam. 😀 😀 <3.
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A fabulous guess!! I do like to spice up my blog every once in a while. 🌶
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Wow, Pam, I really want to know what she did that was the “worse”!
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I have a feeling the answer would not fit into my G rated posts! 😳
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I love to cook and I am clueless. A jalapeño pepper????
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But I bet you don’t have many cans in your pantry, Gerlinde. And I know the answer to this quiz is found fresh in the fields in your part of the country!!
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A can of saurkraut.
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Nothing like a crockpot stew of pork chops and sauerkraut. Excellent guess because I believe sauerkraut has a lot of citric acid. In a few days we’ll know if you are correct. 👌
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When I first caught the title of your post, my brain read ‘Canada Love’. In spite of my ‘disappointment’ that it wasn’t, I loved the story! Curious minds wonder what on earth ‘you’ did to deserve a month long silence, but I loved Artie’s line ‘we are weaved together’ ❤
My guess? The tomatoes.
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Tomatoes are a great canned ingredient for so many things. Including a love affair?
By the way, although I have only been to Canada a few times in my life, I do love Canada because of all the wonderful bloggers like you who write about the glories of your country. 💙
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Tomatoes as an aphrodisiac? hmmm – interesting idea 😉
We Canadians aim to please. It might be a fault actually 🙂
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I love it, Pam! Artie will choke when he reads this.
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Ha ha. I think you are right. They better have the paramedics on hand. 😲😄
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LOL.
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Fruit cocktail. Ha ha. Wonderful snippet. Nothing like a romantic bath to talk about citric acid. Love it, Pam.
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Well, of course you are making me laugh with your answer. Fruit cocktail- that is just awesome. And I’m glad you got a smile from my canned story. 😘
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You know, I totally missed the whole “guess what can” thing, but kept seeing stuff in all the comments SO…I’ll guess corn 🙂
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this is Donna, btw, (writersideup) ’cause for some reason I’m not logged in lol
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Good for you! You’re the first one to guess corn. I love adding corn to my chili and a few other casseroles. You’ll find out the answer in a few days – are you right? 😉
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Is it a jar of pickles? I can see why others think it’s artichoke because of the Artie’s name – very clever Pam 🙂
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Pickle would seem like the perfect answer! The woman in the store certainly got herself in a pickle of a situation. Thanks so much for guessing, Dianne! Are you correct? 😚
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Sauerkraut.
Artie is a smartie . . . he doesn’t waste time hanging on to the “worse” when “better” is up for grabs. 😀
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We have to figure that better must be really really good to make up for the worse. Sauerkraut seems a very appropriate answer. 💙
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Very good and Oh my I really have no clue but will guess a can of diced tomatoes.
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Dicey guess!! Thanks for weighing in. 😘
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Terrific story. Captivating,….haha
A can of peas? Really I have no clue but thought I may as well be original.
Peta
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You are ALWAYS original in wonderful ways, Peta. Thanks for your excellent guess…
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beautiful story
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Thank you, handsome…
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Loved the story! And my guess is going to be canned mandarin oranges.
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Ahh, you are the first to guess mandarin oranges. Makes my mouth water. 🍊Are you right? We’ll find out in a few days…
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My guess is artichokes! Great story, Pam!
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Thanks for the guess and for enjoying the story, Kate! In a few days I’ll post the results… 😊
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I liked the little story. Is it too late to guess? Tomato soup? 🍅
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Not too late to guess, Jennifer. And who can go wrong with tomato soup? 🍅Answer to be revealed in a few days…
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Loved the story…my guess is red cabbage!
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RED CABBAGE – what a colorful answer!!! xo
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Lol ~ thinking German in a can and pickled…
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Nice little episode. A little saucy at the end, so I’ll go with the cranberry sauce. 🙂
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Yummmm. Love cranberry sauce, yet I only eat it at Thanksgiving. That makes no sense, but your answer certainly does….!
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Great story Pam, I like that you’ve created a whole world out of a can of ???? I’m guessing grapefruit.
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Grapefruit is such a great guess, Andrea. Sweet and sour at the same time – definitely a bit acidic. I love fresh-squeezed grapefruit juice. Answer to be revealed within the hour….
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Fabulous story Pam. I won’t pretend to guess because I saw Norah’s guess and your response. 🙂 Well done my friend. 🙂 ❤
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I’ll bet you picked up Fruit Fresh — with citric acid to keep fruit from turning brown.
You blow me away with what you come up with from almost nothing…or perhaps that’s unfair to the can!
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Ha ha. Cans are not given enough credit, are they Elizabeth? I did enjoy making a love story out of a ….can. Fruit Fresh makes sense, given their need for citric acid. Is it the answer? Stay tuned – answer coming up soon. xo
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Darn it all, I saw your answer but I would have said “artichokes”. I swear. This is shouting artichokes at me. In a nice, fun way, that is. 😉
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This was a pleasant and fun way to have a give away, Pamela. I know the answer since the way I play visiting catch up, I start at present and move backwards! 🙂 Take it easy!
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Tricky….!!! 🙂
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Didn’t mean to, since I like guessing games! 🙂
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