“Stevie, I don’t have a creature inside me,” I insist. “In fact, there’s not much left to me at all,” I stare down at my decrepit body, hunched over from arthritis and age.
“That’s the point, Auntie!” Stevie exclaims. “The creature inside you is young. Vibrant. Viral.”
Readers: I’m Lucia, and my story began at the last post (https://roughwighting.net/2023/04/07/the-creature-within/) explaining that my brilliant nephew Stevie is convincing me to take a pill he invented that will help me become“the creature within.” At my old age, crooked with regrets, I decide to take the plunge, so to speak. Many of you guessed I will turn into a dragon, or a bird, a snake or a butterfly. Some of you even guessed I’d become a … well, wait, I’m holding the pill in my hand …
I’m nervous as all get-out. I’ve been a beast at times: a poor wife, a selfish lover, an absent mom and a disbeliever in God or any spiritual authority. So, what, indeed, will this pill create?
Stevie seems to have no doubt. “Auntie, think of your birthdate.”
“March 13. What’s that have to do with anything?” I ask, my old lady crankiness coming to the forefront.

“Pisces” (2/19-3/20) is the Latin word for “fishes.” It is one of the earliest zodiac signs on record..
“And what’s your sign?” he continues.
“I have no damn idea,” I answer as I swipe the pill from his hand and swallow it with a glass of Scotch. After all, it’s 5 p.m. somewhere.
The first thing I hear is a SWISH. I peer behind me and gasp. A….tail? But not a horse tail or a cow tail or even a dog tail. A green scaly tail. My legs disappear and my arms urge me to pull my elongated body toward the beach and the ocean, just yards away from my cottage.
Stevie’s mouth is wide open and he shouts. “Ohhhhh Myyyyy GOD!”
I just slither closer to the water. My skin from waist down is florescent green and mostly tail. The rest of me is bare. Naked! And my breasts are full and bouncy. The breasts of a 20-year-old.
I shout, Ya hoo!! and dive into the surf, my mermaid inner being coming to fruition, thanks to kooky Stevie.
Congrats to Dale, first reader who guessed “mermaid.” https://adelectablelife.com/
Guess Stevie didn’t really expect such a brilliant transformation
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We are often surprised at what is inside us… !! 🙂
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That is definitely true. We under-estimate ourselves and don’t value who we are so much
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Wow! A mermaid, how wonderful.
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As long as you like the ocean, a mermaid seems like a fun way to swim through life (at least for Lucia!) 🙂
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💖😀
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How fantastical !
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Fantasy is reality with flair. 🙂
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Exactly
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Great guess by Dale!
And Lucia will still be able to talk to Stevie (if he’s around the ocean).
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Who knows? Stevie might join her! 🙂
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🙂
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Delightful story Pam. To rebirth and letting out the creature within! 🙂🧞
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Let’s go for it, Brad!!! 🙂
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I love it! A mermaid? Far more interesting that a garden variety dragon! Woohoo! And I love Stevie’s only request….”think of your birthdate”. A magical reset…no matter what the pill contained… and I’m sure the Scotch didn’t hurt one bit! 😊😊😊
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The scotch probably helped as well as the thought of being young – no matter what kind of creature she’d have to become. Born under the Pisces sign, I’ve often wondered what a mermaid’s life is like.🧜🏼♀️
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Ahhh…Pisces! I understand. So much fun to read, Pam. Thank you! 🥰
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I love it! I’m so happy for Lucia!
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Thanks Amy! I have a feeling Lucia is having a ball. An underwater ball! 😀
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Hi Pam – as always, a great story and I love how this finishes – the creature within is bound to discover a lot of surprises!
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I love that so many people told me in the earlier post what kind of creature they think they are. I also like imagining that we often are surprised by the creature we become. 😳
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Yes!
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Wonderful story, Pam!
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Thanks for reading, always, Jill. xo
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You sure do know how to spin those yarns. 🙂 I can see the mermaid in you. I think of them as a romantic creature. Oceans can tell tall tales. Loved the ending.
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I think I’d like to be a sea creature, Marlene, except for the fact that I get terribly motion sick. I can’t even snorkel! ;-0 But mermaids and old ladies make fun tall tales.
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I’m sure you can make a great tale of it.
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Awesome tale! It is not what I expected, but I am not sure what I expected. I love this mermaid ending. 🙂
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As a writer, I like ending with the “unexpected.” Keeps my readers on their toes (or tails, as the case may be). 🙂 Thanks, Linda.
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This Mermaid was photogenic.
I followed your blog let’s follow mine.
Anita
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Hi Anita. Glad you liked Aunt Lucia as a mermaid. She is rather ravishing. And I’ve followed your blog – hope you enjoy my stories!
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Thanks this Mermaid is so amazing.
Anita
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The PILL just took on new meaning! At 85 I’d try it!
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Jeanette – you are young-at-heart and much nicer than Lucia. You don’t need a pill – you’re beautiful as you are. ❤
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What a fun story! I definitely wouldn’t try that pill. I don’t mind getting old, except for the nagging pain!
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Since I get horribly sea sick, I know the ocean would not be the place for me, Jacqui. And I don’t even think of myself as “old.” Not even mature. Give me another 50 years, and then maybe….. 🙂
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Yay Dale! Another great tale, well told, Pam. I’m smiling here.
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A tale worthy of a mermaid tail, huh? 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.
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Oh Pam…I want one of those pills!
No pain, just oceans of beauty on top and
under the water…can Stevie rush one to me?
I’m an Aquarius…water bearer…lol!!!
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Aquarius Pat, if I could get such a pill from Stevie (and if I had a genius-nephew), I’d rush one to you. You would make a gorgeous mermaid, because you are a beautiful woman.
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A swimmingly-good tale (tail?), Pam!
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Glad you enjoyed Aunt Lucia’s transformation, Bruce, THANKS.
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I was not expecting this, but I love the way you described the change and sheer excitement of transformation! ❤
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I admit, I like surprising my readers. Even nephew Stevie was surprised at his Great Aunt’s transformation! 🙂
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I hope she’s in tropical (shark-free) waters, because the first thing I thought of was how cold she would get, especially being so scantily dressed. She looks happy though.
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You are so funny Anneli. The Hawaiian Pacific ocean is the best bet for Lucia the mermaid! 🧜🏼♀️😏
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Sounds good. I’d still want to have a cage handy in case of sharks.
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🙂 You’re such a realist. 🙂
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Yup! I would find it hard to write fantasy, although I’ve enjoyed reading it.
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🙂 I dare you to try some time. A mermaid, or even a merman, may appear to your surprise. 🙂
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I would make all fantasy writers shudder.
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Brilliant… and perhaps you don’t know how brilliant Pam… For we are now well entered into the Age of Aquarius And Mermaids are coming into our consciousness again.. And oh for the top half of a 20 year old LOL…. 🙂 Not so sure I would like the fish tail though.. 😉 … 🙂
Sending LOVE your way Pam… ❤
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Mermaids seem lovely but yes their tails are awfully scaly. The Age of Aquarius is full of hope and new beginnings. So may the mermaids spread the word in the ocean and out that we must take care of our each other and the planet! 🌎
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Amen to that Pam xx 🙏
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I love the inner mermaid 🙂 I wouldn’t mind one bit, Pam!
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I can imagine a fantasy story that you could make up with mermaids, Denise! 🧜🏼♀️💓
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The full bouncy breasts made me crack up along with the Ya-hoo, LOL. Now that’s some pill, Pam. Who knows what awaits us. I loved the finish to this story, my friend. What fun. 🙂
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Thanks for recognizing how much fun I had with Aunt Lucia. She was a blast! We writers can really enjoy ourselves when we go inside a character’s head. You know that so well.
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❤
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I like how you associated the transformation with the zodiac sign! Well-done!
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Being a Pisces myself helps. 😏😇
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I love what’s inside. Congratulations to Dale too.
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Ahh, if only we all knew our insides…
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Would be nice.
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If you have to turn into a creature, mermaid is probably the best way to go!
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Mermaids are lovely and they don’t seem to need a man to get around! 😏
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Heh, heh . . . 🙂
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Woot!!! Love that I called it! And extra points for the “youngening” of those perky breasts (oh, if only….) Wonderful follow-up, Pam. 🙂
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Haha. Congrats, Dale, and thanks for being such a loyal and supportive reader of my stories. xo ❤
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I’m strutting around, right now 😉
And are you kidding me? As if there is any effort required to support your fabulous stories! xo 💞
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xxox ❤
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💞
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How lovely! Literally. 😀
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Ah, high literature my stories may not be, but fun …. YES!! 🙂 xo
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Who said that? Stories that make people think and feel are the ones that /last/. And what is literature but stories that have lasted from generation to generation?
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Yessssssss!!!!!!
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High Five 😀
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YES!!!! 🙂 I love it. And, oh! to be a mermaid. What an adventure!
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Sooo glad you like the sequel, Linda. Hey, who doesn’t like mermaids? 🙂
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Hi Pam, I am also a Pisces and I would also like to be a mermaid with bouncy breasts. Haha!
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🙂 🙂 🙂 xo
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Quite a story, Bette. I read the other one and came to read this one. Didn’t guess mermaid but I was very eager to find out! Who knew making a choice could lead to a whole new life. Beautiful writing, Pam. Hope you are doing well 😊💕
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Thanks, Mabel. I enjoy entering the life of a character in my writing. Aunt Lucia was a kick (and is now a mermaid). 🙂 THANKS for reading along. Pam
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Always very creative with your characters, Pam. Your writing is very gripping. I am always wondering how your stories end. Can’t read fast enough and I like savouring reading, especially good writing and good stories 😄
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You just gave this writer the happy tingles… 🙂 Thanks.
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You are welcome, Pam. You know how to hit the right notes with your characters and words ❤
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Oh, wonderful! Love it.
I am sorry I am a bit late to the party but I knew had to know what transformation Stevie’s pill would bring! 😀
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Hope you were happily surprised. Have a swimingly wonderful day!
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